Friday, April 11, 2014

a short epic

There was once this great fearless army Sargent named Audie Murphy. Audie Murphy had to overcome insurmountable odds and grand adventures to make it back from war to his loving wife and kids. It all started out simple and routine just another military movement back to his home station. That would however, not last very long. Shortly after leaving the Middle East the plane Audie was on would suffer a catastrophic failure.
This failure would force him to parachute out of the plane in the middle of the night with no idea of where he was at or without any survival equipment. Upon landing on a small deserted island in the middle of nowhere he soon realized the insurmountable odds he would have to overcome to make it home. For the first few weeks he managed to survive by finding small amounts of fresh water pools and the occasional crabs to eat. While on the island he had no real means of shelter. Not only was he dealing with the lack of food and shelter Audie also had to figure out a way that he could defend himself from being eaten by some of the most ferocious creatures known to mankind. On one occasion as he was out looking for food he came across a huge man-eating beast that came charging after him. Audie was able to confuse the beast and spear it in the eye to make his escape from certain death. He quickly knew that he could not make it if he did not escape the island so he built a small raft out of drift wood.
Audie set out on his small raggedy crudely built raft to find his way home. As he was sailing the vast ocean he came across a group of massive one eyed monsters of the ocean. These huge fish like creatures would swim up beside him and blow a torrential downpour of water up in the sky and then it would land on him. At times the water would almost capsize his small raft. Audie being the witty guy he is was able to persuade the sea giants to allow him safe passage.
After what seemed like years had passed and everyone assumed he was dead his luck would change for the better. One dark stormy night he would see the brightest lights he has ever seen approach him. Out of the storm came a gigantic ship that was full of people partying. After Audie climbed aboard this massive ship he was able to finally get some good food. Once he shaved for the first time in what had to be years. People quickly discovered who they must have found although he never told anyone. Audie had one last challenge ahead of him. It was finding out if his wife had stayed true to him.    
    

5 comments:

  1. This was interesting and made me wish there was more of it to read.

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  2. This is a good storyline but I think it could use more details and also be a little bit longer. I feel like I was left hanging at the end, wondering if his wife stayed true to him.

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  3. I really liked the story. Wish it was more detailed and a little bit longer. Really wanted it to continue.

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  4. Good story, very deep and interesting, really wanted to continue! :)

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  5. Dustin, I really like what you're doing here. I must admit that I agree with your colleagues: I would like to see more details of what Audie encounters along the way. What happens on the island? Can you give a little more of what happens at sea? I think it will only make a good story better.

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